New song (No name)

[Debus]

Well you probably all know i am not the best writer on these forums but itry every now andthen when i have things to write about. This happens to be one of those times. So, please read and give honest opinions. It's not very good but hey.

These past months have been sheer bliss
You and me in happier times
But now i don't know what's going on
With us and how we feel

We used to be such good friends
But now you have abandoned me
Left me out in the cold
To be with everyone else

Please tell me what happened
What made you change your mind
About everything we had
Why throw it all away now?

I changed my world to be with you
I sometimes wonder what it was for
Was it to feel loved?
Or was it to keep me sane

Why did i even bother
If you were going to do this to me
I thought you might have changed with me
But i know you'll always be the same

What have i done this time?
I don't want to hurt again
So please, please tell me
Why are you breaking me

You cut up my heart once before
Now you're doing it again
The pain is too much to endure
I hope you're happy...

[esaul17]

Pretty good, at first I thought it was a sappy love song (the likes of which I hate) but it quickly picked up the pessamistic vibe that I've come to love.

Also sorry if what you said in the song has really happened to you (which it seems to have). I'm not trying to be insensitive.

[Debus]

Thanks Esaul17. Don't worry about feeling insensitive, you weren't. Anyways, thanks for the comment

[El Postwhore]

EXACTLY how I feel about Lynn. You couldn't have summed it up better...

Nice work! (w00t)

[Trish]

So so sad.
But beautiful at the same time.

[Debus]

Thanks people :)

[~*Numb*~]

that is so... beautifully mornful.... and i am sorry if that did happen to you know one is worth so much pain... :(

[Leones]

It's pretty good Debs! Beautiful. ^_^

[Debus]

Wow, this is the best feedback i have ever got for my work. Thanks so much guys :D