Branden
06-10-2004, 11:27 PM
This is my first writing anything, I'd like some comments and I know that alot needs work. I'm not really sure what it is.. Poem, Lyrics, whatever. Thanks. P.S. I know it's very 'rhymey'. Does that effect it?
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I Don't Want to Stay
\ I break a part of my heart every day
\ To try and find a way
\ To say that I dont want to be here,
\ I don't want to stay
\ With all of this tension
\ And all this apprehension
\ I'm just waiting to die,
\ Can't you see in my eyes?
\ Can you see in my soul?
\ I'm in this hole
\ Without parole.
\ I don't want to stay, with all of this pain,
\ No, I don't want to stay.
\ I need to go, go away
\ The skies here are grey
\ I'll make my way from here,
\ because I cannot stay,
\ No, I just simply cannot stay.
\ I don't want to stay!
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I Don't Want to Stay
\ I break a part of my heart every day
\ To try and find a way
\ To say that I dont want to be here,
\ I don't want to stay
\ With all of this tension
\ And all this apprehension
\ I'm just waiting to die,
\ Can't you see in my eyes?
\ Can you see in my soul?
\ I'm in this hole
\ Without parole.
\ I don't want to stay, with all of this pain,
\ No, I don't want to stay.
\ I need to go, go away
\ The skies here are grey
\ I'll make my way from here,
\ because I cannot stay,
\ No, I just simply cannot stay.
\ I don't want to stay!