"Survivor"

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  1. Fury99

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    This is a rough draft of "Survivor" from the Legacy Of Origin collection.

    [Very soft piano]

    Hurricanes and tornadoes
    destroy the land, that’s how it goes
    People pray for survival
    before their supposed ends come

    I am a survivor
    I have what it takes
    to make it out alive
    because I… survived

    Wishing upon the stars
    hoping for a better tomorrow
    thinking about the outcome without
    having the sense of disappointment

    I am a survivor
    I have what it takes
    to make it out alive
    because I… survived

    [piano build up to guitar strings]

    I am a survivor
    I have what it takes
    to make it out alive
    because I….

    Survived [over guitar riffs and piano]

    I survived

    Along the way






    I didn't think it was that good so I want some honest feedback, advice, and suggestions. Anything is welcome.
     
  2. Shmoanator

    Shmoanator Guest

    I think it's interesting. The lyrics in the refrain kind of fall a little flat, though. Whenever I write, I always try to make sure the words still make sense when I say them, as if I were using them when speaking normally. I'm a survivor. I have what it takes to make it out alive, because I survived. The first three lines are pretty good, but the last because I survived doesn't quite fit.
    These are just my thoughts, of course. You can do whatever you want with this. I was just giving my honest opinion. :)
     

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