Somatically Dreaming

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  1. ChooseYourPoison

    ChooseYourPoison nymphetamine

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    Somatically Dreaming

    A dream encased in white
    A freezing reality penetrated
    The now lucid dream stands alone
    Glistening with regret on a stage
    Reflecting the spot light.

    Rays of confidence
    Diminished by anticipation
    Left to bleed by themselves
    But not necessarily on their own

    The dream always remains
    Strained in the back of reality’s head
    Lurking in the shadows of doubt
    Whilst the beams of pride
    Beat to the rhythm of their own drums

    The silent hymn to capability hums
    And eyes so bright shine like orbs
    Repel the fear by a flick of a violent lash.

    Scenery painted beautifully with blood
    An illuminated stage brightly reflects
    Every emotion which nestles, merely
    shrouded in between narrow crevices of the wood.

    While the audience is kept in low expectation,
    The dream ceases to exist, and as the audience
    Is swept away carelessly, the theater remains.
     
  2. MeLiS_

    MeLiS_ Well-Known Member

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    good job, i love it.. :)
     
  3. sickcycle

    sickcycle Well-Known Member

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    Brilliance personified, great job, with wonderfuly descriptive words, and a less used subject.
     
  4. fallenangel

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    i really like this! love the last three lines!
    brill :D
     
  5. ChooseYourPoison

    ChooseYourPoison nymphetamine

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    Thanks for the compliments guys, I appreaciate it a lot. I wish I would've been able to say more about it but I was in a rush. I posted this while I was at school, and didn't have it written down and the bell was about to ring. ;)

    Its kind of inspired by Phantom Of The Opera..if anyone caught on to it. :)
     
  6. D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    WOW, this is really great.
    You are extremely talented.
    I loved this poem,
    i'm just speachless.
    Great job!
     
  7. Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    yeah, i just LOVED that movie, and i felt as if i was inside the movie. Great poem, the subject's fascinating and so are your lines. terrific work! i believe you are a very talented writer. this is just awesome. keep writing! :D
     
  8. Il inno di morte

    Il inno di morte A noi si schiude il ciel...

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    yeah, i just LOVED that movie, and i felt as if i was inside the movie. Great poem, the subject's fascinating and so are your lines. terrific work! i believe you are a very talented writer. this is just awesome. keep writing! :D
     

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