Pretend This is dedicated to my uncle...Rest In Peace My eyes are sore, my hands are cold The thick dark mist rolls in My back it shivers, my teeth they chatter The time is now…it must begin. I grasp your hand, you clasp mine back Your head it rests down on my chest A single tear floats from your eye My heart just cannot say good bye. She said that it would happen soon I didn’t comprehend I thought that we had many years To laugh, to love, sing and pretend. The light flashed bright, it blinded me It happened all so fast The other car, it hit your side The moment wouldn’t pass I sit here now, my eyes are sore My hands are cold again My back still shivers, my teeth still chatter But now I can’t pretend… ..comments please...
Beautiful, I thought that in one or two verses the rhyming didn't really flow, but it was good on the whole. Edit: True, Saunderitos. So, this was really good.
it's just amazing, beautiful....great job...and sorry about your loss. 9.9/10 sorry about your uncle, again.
It's a strange feeling when you lose someone close to you, and just writing about it helps you exept that they're gone. Great job.
Thanks you guys....you are all pretty much spot on, it was just to release the hatered for myself and stuff that I had bottled up all this time.... So parts dont rhyme, its true, but not all parts need to rhyme.....right? :wth: Anyways, thanks for all your support, much appreciated!!!