Justify

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  1. Will

    Will bread crumbs & white stones LPA Addicted VIP

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    "Justify"

    (verse 1)
    I used to be euphoric
    Now I can't find nothin' for it
    I can't see my dreams
    It's not how it should be
    Everything's fallin' apart
    I need to get a new start

    (chorus)
    The weak live only to justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the darkness

    (verse 2)
    Time is countin' down
    I only hope I don't drown
    You've been pullin' me under
    You've found my one blunder
    Everything's fallin' apart
    I need to get a new start

    (chorus)
    The weak live only to justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the

    (bridge)
    Clock counts down to the end of the day
    It's constantly tickin' our life away
    There's nothin' we can do to stop it
    If only I could stop and drop it
    I'd change my life today
    And I'd find another way
    To deal with the pain I have inside
    If only.. if only I could fly

    (outro)
    The weak live to justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the

    Music plays only to justify the silence
    Just as
    Time clock ticks down to the end of the day

    The weak live only the justify the strong
    Just as the
    Sun shines only to

    Just as the
    Sun shines only to

    Just as the
    Sun shines only to justify the darkness
     
  2. dark_assassin

    dark_assassin Well-Known Member

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    :eek: thats really really good!! :D
     
  3. Will

    Will bread crumbs & white stones LPA Addicted VIP

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    Thanks.
     
  4. Ryan

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    It sounds pretty cool. But I think the chorus seems too short. Other than that it seems like the lyrics flow pretty smooth.
     
  5. Pinkin Lark

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    yea smooth flows i like it
     
  6. Rybullet

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    you've got one thing that most songwriters don't have.........Flow..... Nice work..
     
  7. Pinkin Lark

    Pinkin Lark Prince of Persia.

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    most do have flow though like akuma, you just got to put your mind to it
     
  8. Rybullet

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    yea but the beat is usually hard to find....... but the beat in this song is very easy to recognize.......
     
  9. Pinkin Lark

    Pinkin Lark Prince of Persia.

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    yea but the beat is usually hard to find....... but the beat in this song is very easy to recognize....... [/b][/quote]
    for beats you got to have alot of imagination like lp they dont have the same style as other rock bands their unique thats why they are the best!
     
  10. Rybullet

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    well all I meant was the beat was very easy to recognize, I wasn't saying that it wasn't unique or anything.........
     
  11. Pinkin Lark

    Pinkin Lark Prince of Persia.

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    yea i see what your saying
     
  12. Rybullet

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    yea i see what your saying [/b][/quote]
    kool, finally someone understands me.......
     
  13. Bryan

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    Seems like it would be cool put to music, good job.
     
  14. Nikki

    Nikki I have no idea what is going on LPA Super Member

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    Damn you Will that's just classic.

    Like someone else said, you should work on the chorus a little bit-stretch it out a bit *shrugs* I wouldn't know...I'm only creative when it comes to drawing...not lyrics.

    Keep it up mate ;)
     
  15. Amy

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    are you, Derek and your friend still going to form a band? If you still are, is that gonna be one of your songs? that would be heaps cool if you did.
     
  16. it;s really good
    you really have something to say
    keep it up
     
  17. PP:KUt

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    hmm yeah i like it!!! but one thing: i think u could add a few "minor" words to kinda make it flow better, so that one line isnt like really short, just add little words. u prolly dont get what i mean tho!! lol
     
  18. katja_88

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    yeah..It's pretty cool but maybe the chorus is to short..anyway it's a good one :D
     
  19. erasethepain

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    I don't think you need to make the chorus longer. It all depends on how you sing it, I guess.

    The only part of the song I dislike is:

    No offense, but thats a rip from In The End. I love the rest of the song, and I'd love to see you put it into a song and play it. You might want to add a few more lines to the verses though. Just depends. The endings pretty long which is pretty damn cool.

    Good job, man. Write some more.
     
  20. Will

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    I took it from "In The End" on purpose. Most of the songs I write have a line from an LP song in them. They inspire me to write what I write.
     

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