Forgive Me

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  1. Anya

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    It's nothing much I guess. I just felt like writing down random feelings.. I hope it goes well as a poem, so far I like it.

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    -Forgive Me-

    I've opened up my mind
    to find my soul and define my reason
    I hope you can forgive me-
    for all i've done has only shattered in ruin..
    everything I touch turns solid-
    almost as solid as my heart beating outragously within me..
    but deep down my sorrow overcomes these thoughts
    drowning my feelings and what's left of me down farther
    I wish I could take it back
    everything i've said..
    everything i've done..
    but now I know what causes you this anger is me
    so for that I have no right to live..
     
  2. Leslie

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    Great job, Anya!
     
  3. Andrea

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    Very good, Anya.

    I think you have a spelling mistake.

    It should be shattered. Just thought I would point that out. ;)
     
  4. Anya

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    Oh my god you're right. I can't believe it! I'm a neat freak when it come's to these things. :lol:

    Well thankyou, Andrea. :D
     
  5. _PianoPaPercut_

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    I like..! Short but it has meaning.. ^^
     
  6. Anya

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    Thanks. Anymore comments? :)
     

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