alone i'll be crying bloody tears silent fears escaping me the scars dont go away flashing bright signals reminding me to leave i've helped you too long your sickness is inside me now your hate and fear inside me now your love and lies inside of me your power overwhelms me and once again i feel the fall there is just the silence as i crash to the ground breaking bones and air and hearts i've helped you too long your sickness is inside me now your hate and fear inside me now your love and lies inside of me i've loved you too long this sickness is stuck inside me my hate and fear trapped inside me my love and lies escape me and once again i fall for you i'd lie for you i'd die for you and once again i call for you but you won't hear no you won't care i've helped you too long your sickness is inside me now your hate and fear inside me now your love and lies inside of me i've loved you too long this sickness is stuck inside me my hate and fear trapped inside me my love and lies escape me i've lied for too long this sickness overthrows me no more hate inside of me no more love inside of me just a dying flower i'll be naturally alone i'll be don't you carbon copies all around don't you see it? don't you see the imposters? its just a lie they don't love you you're just a lie don't you hear it don't you hear them laughing? you're just a joke to them just a star du jour they'll find another love another life to take you're living a lie you're too blind to see don't fall into the light you'll end up like me mini armies all around don't you see it? don't you see the swarms of you? they are lying right to your face its just a facade don't you hear it? don't you hear the bullsh-t? you're just a joke to them just a star du jour they'll find another love another life to take you're living a lie you're too blind to see don't fall into the light you'll end up like me killing dreams with evil schemes is what they're famous for they'll take your soul make you feel whole then kick your ass right out the door they'll scream your name they'll give you fame but really they won't even care but you can't see and its killing me because what they're doing just ain't fair silent glances all around don't you see it? don't you see how they betray you? fallen angels pull you in don't you hear it? don't you hear how they cry for you? you're just a joke to them just a star du jour they'll find another love another life to take you're living a lie you're too blind to see don't fall into the light you'll end up like me you'll end up like me this fallen angel sees how horrible fame can be they aren't the greatest, but what can I say, I'm not that great of a writer... :wth: EDIT- forgot there was a swear
yes, I agree with Katie. I had to read it two times to know wich one I liked the best. In my opinion it would even be better if you changed the 2nd or 3th 'inside' to another word or words. your sickness is inside me now your hate and fear inside me now your love and lies inside of me Keep writing to improve. I would like to see more of your writings later.